A (very) small Lynn inconsistency

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uggron
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A (very) small Lynn inconsistency

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Feels kinda petty to even bring this up, but I figure you might appreciate the feedback, especially when you probably won't have too change much.

At one point during the wind festival, Lynn says "I usually go to the elven places, but sometimes I like to come here." (about the Barking Duck)

But afterwards, in a later event she says "That's where I go too. I prefer it, honestly..." etc. (again about the Barking Duck)

It could have been intentional, but basically she first implies that going to the Barking Duck is the exception, but then she implies it's the rule. There isn't any actual contradiction; she might just mean that she less frequently goes to the Barking Duck despite preferring it, but that would seem odd to me. It's the sort of minor thing only really nitpicky would-be writers like me would notice :P
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Re: A (very) small Lynn inconsistency

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Yes other people reported this, but I think it's because Lynn doesn't want Amber to know what she does in that elven place (the dance thing). I might change it though if people think it's too confusing.
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Re: A (very) small Lynn inconsistency

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That does seem possible. Sorry that it's already mentioned - I couldn't find a search function on the forum anywhere.
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Re: A (very) small Lynn inconsistency

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No worries :) There isn't a global search but in each subforum should appear on top of the page.
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