Joanne's intro:
blog/2015/09/the-queen-of-thieves-joanne/
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Kira's intro:
blog/2015/09/the-queen-of-thieves-kira/
blog/2015/09/the-queen-of-thieves-kira/
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I have a feeling those two weren't written on the same day.
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I wrote all of them on the same day.yayswords wrote:I have a feeling those two weren't written on the same day.
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Trap sprung - post the last one then. 
No but seriously, Kira's intro has words and expressions I had to look up. Joanne's didn't, and I don't think anything I've read in Loren or SotW has had them either. So it stood out.
Oh also, last paragraph, first sentence: his -> has. And while we're at it, perhaps little -> few?
No but seriously, Kira's intro has words and expressions I had to look up. Joanne's didn't, and I don't think anything I've read in Loren or SotW has had them either. So it stood out.
Oh also, last paragraph, first sentence: his -> has. And while we're at it, perhaps little -> few?
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I could but then jack would have nothing to post in his blogs for the next couple of months.yayswords wrote:No but seriously, Kira's intro has words and expressions I had to look up. Joanne's didn't, and I don't think anything I've read in Loren or SotW has had them either. So it stood out.
Apart from a couple of typos (which irk me now that I see them) what in particular did you find unusual?
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Illicit liaisons I could guess at because of the context, but I googled it to be sure. Foibles I had to outright look up, at first I even thought that sentence (because of that and the typo) was an experiment to see if you could let Jack write one line without us noticing lol. Woe betide was the third one but I suppose it's not that tricky.
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Haha yes, I can't post the last one now. I also have a few more characters beside Thalia, secondary ones, so yes those I can probably group in a single post 
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Oh okay. Honestly, I wasn't trying to write it in a way to cause confusion. I just write that way naturally. ^^;yayswords wrote:Illicit liaisons I could guess at because of the context, but I googled it to be sure. Foibles I had to outright look up, at first I even thought that sentence (because of that and the typo) was an experiment to see if you could let Jack write one line without us noticing lol. Woe betide was the third one but I suppose it's not that tricky.