As with the other games, you won't find many other typos/suggestions.
Original:
Susana
There's a lot of work to be done today, and it's already 8:00am.
Suggestion:
I would recommend putting a space between 8:00 and 'am', and capitalize the 'am' (Later dialogues actually have AM as capitalized, and spaced)
...and it's already 8:00 AM.
Original:
Sam holds up his hands in self defense.
Suggestion:
Put a hyphen between 'self' and 'defense' to get 'self-defense'
Original:
Natalie
Oh, I'll guess I'll go then.
Suggestion:
Having two "I'll" is a little awkward. I would recommend changing the first 'I'll' to just 'I' to get:
Oh, I guess I'll go then.
Original:
Natalie
It's fine you, can laugh.
Suggestion:
Move the comma to after 'fine':
It's fine, you can laugh.
Original:
Sam marches into his kitchen with a a hint of a smirk on his face.
Suggestion:
You have two 'a's after 'with'. One can be removed:
Sam marches into his kitchen with a hint of a smirk on his face.
Original:
Steve
Besides, I'll burn if off working outside later today, anyway.
Suggestion:
The 'if' should be 'it':
Besides, I'll burn it off working outside later today, anyway.
Steam Winter in Fairbrook Typos / Suggestion
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