Could I give some character development suggestions with Vera Blanc and Brandon? As well as surrounding ones. I don't want to impose, but if I think I can really see some improvements that can be made, as a writer myself.
Hey guys, it's katoji. I made a new account because for some strange reason, no matter how many times I tried to log in with the other account, it wouldn't let me. Even when I requested new passwords.
Anyway, well I played the Vera Blanc games quite awhile ago so forgive me if i have any information wrong. I found that Vera Blanc was a pretty intriguing character, however, I often think that she's too perfect. The only thing I found wrong with her was that in the first game, the police underestimated her ability. However in the second game (to be honest I've only played half of it...never came back to finishing it haha) everyone seemed to absolutely LOVE her and be entranced by her beauty.
I think maybe her position as I think, Brandon's assistant/partner(or is she an actual detective as well?) could undermine her. They could present real flaws to her character in the way that she could be only taken for her looks rather than her intelligence. This could blend well with her mind-reading ability and the fact that she can't tell anyone about it.
I also think Brandon's friend (Anna I think? From the FBI?) could take on a more major role in the games, and to heat things up between the two protagonists. Maybe Brandon could feel that Vera is unreachable and does something with Anna instead. I'd also like to know about his past. Why aren't Brandon/Anna working together anymore? Has he ever failed to save anyone? Is he a ladies' man? (or was?)
I think your position with a female protagonist is more attractive to the female gamer. in my opinion. I found, as a female gamer myself, that I was kind of put off by all the attention Vera was getting in the second novel. She came off as too perfect and too effeminate,a character the readers/players can't fully immerse themselves in. A woman would love to be beautiful, but not get that much attention - though I'm not sure how the 'sexy' stuff would come in, to attract male gamers?
I was thinking, because her 'mind works like a computer' - maybe she could lack emotions at times? That could hinder or help her work with cases.
Don't get me wrong though - I love the characters. I think they're awesome, and I'd love to be Vera. I think I'm also curious as to how her brain surgery worked?
On a side note: I read that Vera Blanc wasn't selling well. Have you tried gaining recognition through comic-book fans, or forums? I think a visual novel would be a perfect medium for them; a comic book with more interactivity.
Okay yup, I think that's all I have to say. There's more but I can't think of it. Anyway, I'm sorry if I've insulted!